For a very first story this is excellent. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you!
That was really good, especially for a first fic! If you hadn't said that it was your first, I wouldn't have known. Great smut, I love it!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
For your first fic, this is pretty good! You have some grammatical errors and a few spelling issues, which a beta reader could help with, but all in all...I'm impressed :) Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Yeah, I could do with a beta reader, I find it hard to read my own writings let alone sift through them and pick out mistakes.
Good effort, especially for a first posting. Most important thing is that it's in character, which I believe it is. The punctuation could use a bit of work in places, though. Here's one example, this sentence--
“This” he spat, inches away from Ianto’s face “is not my fault.
You need a comma after This and also after face.
If you have any other stories, you should post them.
Author's Response: Thank you, I had a lot of trouble with keeping them in character and I was pretty sure that I lost it. I have trouble with punctiation, commas especially. I always add them in where they shouldn\'t be and then leave them out where they should! Thank you again. :)
For your first time out - this was fantastic! As to your other weird stories you say you have - don't be mean - share - nothings too weird to be here as long as it is Doctor Who or Torchwood related. VBG!
Author's Response: Ahah. Thank you very much, maybe I\'ll try writing some of the weird ones and posting them here.
Yaaaay you did it! This was just marvellous - great idea you had there. It was very sexy, you write very well. You're definitely a natural. Thank you for this, I very much enjoyed it :D
Author's Response: :D I\'m glad you liked it, it took me so long to write that I probably rambled a lot throught. It was an idea I\'d had for a wee while, there\'s a couple more but they\'re too weird to ever write about. Probably. ;)