2008.03.29 - 06:58AM
4: Chapter 4: Shards of What Was

This chapter makes me cry like a baby everytime I read it.

Well done.

wmr
2006.10.26 - 11:06AM
4: Chapter 4: Shards of What Was

And with every chapter there's another passage that hits me so hard where it hurts. I can see Jack's turmoil here, his conflict between what he wants himself - his 'family', the relationship that's grounded him and given him a place to call home, back in one piece - and the hard decision of which of the Doctor and Rose needs him most. And, of course, it's the Doctor, the man who almost kills him.

“You don’t want to do this, Jack,” he said in a deceptively soft voice, his eyes cold and features set as if they were carved into stone. His control was complete. It had to be, or he’d shatter into a thousand pieces.

“Don’t I?” Jack bit back, taking a step closer to the Doctor. “Give me one good reason why not. I saw Rose, you know. Saw a few of the marks you left on her. Tell me something, Doctor,” he went on, pushing harder and harder with his words. “Do you always like it that rough or was it just something about Rose in particular. Because you did a damn good jo–”

Without conscious thought the Doctor growled and grabbed Jack, slamming him up against the wall. Hearing that he had indeed marked Rose cracked his control with one hit. “Don’t,” he hissed.

Jack just arched a brow at him. “Evidently it’s rough up your companion night on the ol’ TARDIS, huh?” he drawled. “Suppose I should have realized I’d get a turn as well.”


I don't know which of them I'm hurting for more here: Jack or the Doctor. :(

Another Kleenex bill coming your way!

2006.08.14 - 12:41AM
4: Chapter 4: Shards of What Was

Best chapter so far! Dialogue and everything was just right on! Even the TARDIS didn't want to leaver Rose. For sure because she's the one that saved her for the Doctor. Then they both had to go and screw it up...literally. I'm hoping to read more!

2006.08.12 - 03:22PM
4: Chapter 4: Shards of What Was

Oh god this is so angsty and beautiful. So sad. I love Jack in this, Rose too! Very well written!

2006.08.12 - 09:50AM
4: Chapter 4: Shards of What Was

Dark and so angsty - loved it all. Dialogue between all the characters was superb! Thanks you

2006.08.11 - 08:44PM
4: Chapter 4: Shards of What Was

Very interesting complexity of emotions.

Yes, you wrote Jack beautifully. This was my favourite...
Jack just arched a brow at him. “Evidently it’s rough up your companion night on the ol’ TARDIS, huh?” he drawled. “Suppose I should have realized I’d get a turn as well.”

2006.08.11 - 07:58PM
4: Chapter 4: Shards of What Was

Jack and the Doctor's dialog is superb. Very strong. I like this direction.