I'm so glad that all of Jack's doubt and insecurity about his relationship with the Doctor has been resolved. My favourite part of the chapter is the scene at the end with the big rescue where they kiss. It was just perfect.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, it's wonderful to hear that you enjoyed the story so much. I loved writing that scene, I'm glad that you liked it, too. :)
Great story! I can hardly wait for the next chapter. Poor Jack, even his happiness at being made to do repairs looks a little sad, when you realise that one of the main reasons behind it has to be that he is so certain he’s only allowed in the Tardis as long as he’s useful. I was wondering if the problem in communication here came from the characters using different love languages – Rose and the Doctor think that just by spending quality time with Jack, they’re showing that they like him, but Jack needs either words or some sort of material proof of their feelings? Also, I have a theory about why Jack’s room is so small and uncomfortable – when Jack came onboard, he was quite full of guilt and self-loathing for, you know, almost killing the human race. So I believe the Tardis picked up on those feelings and gave him the room he thought he deserved. Or even the room he kind of wanted, in a trying-to-atone/punish-himself sort of way.
Also, I don’t know if you currently have a beta-reader? Because I’d love to beta your stories – your spelling and grammar are quite good but I mean also in a ‘discussing the story’ kind of way? Although I confess I’m not sure how this works, fanfiction.net had a section dedicated to this but I can’t seem to find it on Teaspoon? And I just created an account on AO3 (with the same username) but I mean ‘just created’ as in ‘I only received my invitation today’, so I’m not sure how this stuff works there either. And you’d probably like to know me a little better before starting to send me unpublished texts, which is more than fair, so maybe I shouldn’t have written that at all, but well, here I have this whole paragraph typed, so if you want, you can consider this an unnecessarily long-winded way to say that I’d be open to beta some of your stories in the future, if it’s something you think you’d like (but if not, zero pressure!)
Anyway, congrats for writing this, and thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your comment. :) I hope you forgive me if I don't reply in full length to everything you've written since it would just be a repeat of what I've already written on AO3. ^^ AO3 doesn't have a section dedicated to beta readers. Your only option is to send someone your stuff via email (which I've done with some of my beta readers) or to use a cloud service (which I haven't done so far). ^^ You know, English isn't my first language so I'm extremely pleased to hear (or read) that my grammar and spelling are good, it took me years to get to that point. Thank you! :) I have on-off beta readers if that makes any sense. Not everyone is interested in everything I write so they decide if they want to beta read something or not. ^^ I feel truly honored by your offer but I fear that's not how I write. If I get an idea, I play around with it until a plot forms then I shape that plot, visualize the scenes in my head, write a complete outline (which can still change during the writing process) and then I write it down in total. And then I let it sit for a while before I read through it again to find plot holes and correct grammar and spelling errors (if I catch them). I don't mind discussing the story at that point but I can't do it during the writing process. It'd stress me too much, sorry. ^^" That said, I'm not saying that I'd never want to work with you as a beta reader but it's bad timing. I'll soon have to start studying for my final exams at university and I'll take a whole semester to prep for them therefore I won't be any good working with someone new. I just don't have the mental capacity for it. I hope you can understand that. =) Again, thank you very much for your comment(s). :)
Poor Jack. He doesn't feel like he belongs with Rose and the Doctor. I think it has a lot to do with his past and everyone and everything he's lost in his life. His room seems to reflect those feelings. I couldn't believe how small it was compared to Rose's bedroom. Great chapter!
Author's Response: You're right, Jack is convinced that they don't see him as a friend. I'm not sure if his room is reflecting these feelings, maybe. ^^ Thanks for your comment, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. :)