My favorite line: Daleks are a fruit,” he added, “with seeds on the outside and a shiny skin.”
Oz might be better than Jack for a name...
Fun, on the whole.
This was really cute and interesting, I was just a bit confused about a few things: what does the Doctor mean that Jack's mum is an alien? And was it Twelve/Clara, or what? A really great story overall though. I like how you threw Missy and the Paternoster Gang in there.