Totally agree with the other reviewers. The tone you captured was perfectly the doctor, and perfectly Capaldi doctor too. And somehow didn't make Twelve/Clara totally wrong in the process!
This was a really fun read. Each scene had a simple premise of the Doctor and Clara preparing for bed during their various adventures, and each was hilarious. Thank you for sharing.
I agree with River_Runs. You've got writing the Doctor down perfectly! :D
She folded her arms across her chest. “Oi! What sort of woman do you think I am?”
“A short one,” he said, “with control issues and you're easily offended. But,” he added, “you're the sort that doesn't feel up her friends while they're asleep.”
I read this in about four different Doctors' voices, and it worked in every single one. I think that's the first time a fic has really given me the sense that this really is the same guy, no matter the incarnation. Great dialogue. (And very funny!)