2012.08.06 - 05:07PM
2: Four Beats

Nicely done. You gotta love time travel where it can be 16 years for Beth and only two weeks for the Doctor since they last met.

I liked this dialog the best:
“You must’ve been really young then.”

Something in her expression or her tone must have given her away, because he chuckles suddenly and it’s a really rich, deep sound. The smile that splits his face utterly transforms it, and he looks lovely. “You little sneak. Don’t think I can’t see what you’re fishing for, young lady.”

She rolls her eyes and huffs. “Okay, so I’m not Sherlock Holmes–you don’t have to rub it in. Would you just answer the question?”

I am certainly looking forward to more.

2012.08.02 - 09:41PM
1: Prologue: The Child

I am really intrigued about this series. What an interesting start.

You hooked me with this:
He can feel Time thrumming around them, can feel the Facts that exist with the baby’s timeline even if he doesn’t know what they are…

He can feel their timelines intertwining, and that’s a Fact, too. It’s terrifying, and it’s exhilarating.

I cannot wait to see where you take this. More please!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much, and thanks for the favorite! I\'m so glad you liked those lines - I think I liked writing them the most. :) Thank you again, and I ought to have an update today!