I liked this, quite a bit. As has been said, you captured their voices very well!
What a wonderful little story. I can totally see this happening. You really captured both of their voices.
Wonderful! Makes absolute sense that Jack would look into the matter of the Pandorica and encounter Rory.
This was beautiful.BTW, since Rory is now a Nestene in the form of a Roman Centurion and had guared the Pandorica for 2,000 years would that make him older than either the Doctor or Jack?
And since reality has changed and is Rory still a Nestene or is he human again?