excellent and realistic.
I love the paragraph that starts with "she knows with a sudden clarity...". Perfect atmosphere of tense, awkward, "oh crap what have we done" where everyone got off but no one really enjoys themselves.
Perfectly awkward ending...
Very intense! I love the line about wondering how flexible the rest of his "rules" are. Heh.
Guh, this was hot.
Different thanwhat I expected but good!