so subtle touch in the description of the mental worlds of the TWO. And really color the characters with life and emotion. like this one even it really battered my heart to read this one...(crying loudly )T_T
Author's Response: Wow. Someone read it! I actually really like this story, experimental as it was. If this one broke your heart, God knows, don\'t read One More Night! Thanks.
I loved this story!!! I just watched the comic cons, and a bit of Gareth's Gallifrey One or something, and this fit so perfectly because I was really disturbed after what Adam did to Ianto...and I just hated all his pain and suffering! This is really good, and if you could have used Italics you could've bolded and italisized (is that how you spell it?!) Jack's thoughts and just italisized Ianto's thoughts.
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked it. I don\'t know, though, I\'m starting to like the unique format.
Oh, such unhappiness. Poor Ianto. I think about that, sometimes, what it would be like to be trying so hard, scared of Jack and scared of Lisa (he wasn't an idiot, even if he wasn't letting himself admit it), and always completely exhausted. And poor Jack because he is Jack. Yep, very nicely done.
Author's Response: Oh, good o. Glad you liked it. It worked out in the end. Well, until it all went horribly wrong.
What an interesting idea! and very believable for both characters.
Author's Response: I thought so.
Wow.. this really works... they talk but never really "talk"
And I kind of like the way you did it. If you just used italics, it would have been harder to know who's thoughts were whose.
Author's Response: Yeah, I came to that conclusion too after a couple of format attempts. Keeping the thoughts in the same paragraph made it read too slow, and seperating them made it too hard to follow without -- inventive quotation marks.
Really well done, have to admit had to read it twice to work out who's hinking what but once you get past that its really good and completely plausible. i think ianto probably would've wanted to tell someone in the end cos it would've gotten too much for him and jack would've been the one he told so i can see them both thinking these things. look forward to reading more from you;)
Author's Response: Actually, I like reading this one through twice, myself, and then reading it through again. This is actually less a \'story\' than it is an excercise in human thought -- I\'m playing with you! You are all my canvas, you wonderful humans! Fanfic gives you such a wonderful opportunity for experimentation.
the pair of them are just SO irritating!!
great story :D
Author's Response: Well, I\'ve always found that most relationships crumble, or never get off the ground, because no one actually says what they\'re thinking.
actually, once you get used to the pattern this is very good.
Author's Response: Why thank you. I\'m just playing, so I get to do anything I want.
Brilliantly written. Lovely, though the formating was a bit distracting.