Wonderful story. Your OC worked brilliantly. Loved this story! Keep writing!!
I really enjoyed this. It was a great Dr. Who story.
Totally worth going out on a limb to read something by an author I've never read before. You wove a vivid, enthralling story out of an imagination of a calibre I can only speculate upon! Congrats and kudos on a wonderfully crafted story. *added to favourites*
That last sentence is just gorgeous. I can totally see Ten in this situation. His dialogue, the tone you gave him - it's all spot on.
Lovely Ten rant. The anger, the bitchiness, it's very him and makes for excellent reading. I especially love Eve's reaction to the trauma of this chapter.
Spiffing Asimov reference and Ten passing out at the end was very IC.
Beautiful! So strange and wonderfully DW. It's exactly the sort of thing I'd expect to read in something written by Moffat or another top notch series writer.
Now I definitely did *not* see that coming. For some strange reason, I had Cobalt pegged as a blonde. The imagination is a bizarre thing isn't it? Nicely maintained suspense here.
Graphic and utterly devastating. I have a feeling you're going to write the TARDIS brilliantly. Poor Ten ... he's so cut out for angst, isn't he?
And just *who* is Cobalt? Nicely constructed.
Ooo, Cobalt is creepy. I'm not sure whether to distrust him or appreciate all he's done. What a great way to introduce a character in the flesh - by putting Eve on the back foot. Kudos.
You've got a good knack for fleshing out your ancillary characters before we meet them in the flesh. It makes for pleasant reading.
This is so urgent and full of angst. It makes a lovely counterpoint to their earlier more soothing conversation. I'm very curious as to how Ten got caught up in the Time War, seeing as it was before his time. I'm looking forward to seeing it all unfold.
Beautifully done. You write a convincing Doctor and you've managed to flesh out your OC a bit too. Nice continuation.