2007.09.22 - 06:07PM
3: Chapter 3

Bit of an awkward chapter, methinks. Still very, very good, but it just seemed a little...Forced? I'm not sure that's the proper word. Still brilliant, but at this particular moment the plot seems a little stagnant. Or maybe I'm losing my mind. Yeah, that's probably it.

Author's Response: Hm, that\'s not something anybody\'s told me before - I\'ll have to re-read the chapter myself tomorrow and think about it. It\'s good that you\'re telling me though, because I\'m planning a new fic right now so every bit of constructive criticism is welcome!=)