Oh poor John, that's going to crush him when he finds her gone, especially since he's already lost his wife and daughter already. And I know that he'll supposidly forget her in a week but I dont think he actually will... not if he's got the Doctor's memories anyway.
Anyway, this is a truely great story! So sad but wonderful at the same time. Poor Rose.
egads! the tension mounts! You are the Master ( in a good way not the pointy bearded way ) Thanks for such quality writing!
I must admit I have been very suspicious about Aiden from the get go ...why does he wish Rose to leave the Universe so urgently ... I think he is the blot on Rose's landscape. As to the Rose and John relationship - Go John an dbring her back! I'm loving htis as it isn't easy to predict which way this story is going to turn next. Brilliant Job!!
Author's Response: You\'ll find out what Aiden\'s about very soon. As for John--you seem to have guessed at least part of what his reaction to this whole fiasco will be. Oh, hey, look, a new chapter!
i'm sorry but im still keeping my fingers crossed for 10thdoctor/rose! she must remember how much she loved 10!
Author's Response: Can\'t promise anything. Rose still has choices to make, and John\'s not exactly going to be passive.
Oo nooo! "Very, very bad"- no likee! Sniffle- poor Jake! I can only conclude that Rose was particularly quick to trust the word of a virtual stranger with still-mysterious motives because she's wracked with guilt over Jake's death, sleep-deprived and very confused. I wish sh'd told John what was going on!
I find it more than a little suspicious that Aiden was so quick to say "Yeah, you have to leave". And doesn't John have a say in whether they stay together or not? Sigh. Great chapter, but I'm biting my nails! I'm hoping for a happy ending for both Rose and John, but hey, this isn't my story. :) I think this is the moment where one is staring down at the big drop on the roller coaster! Gulp! Still along for the ride!
Author's Response: That was the thing I was trying for--a Rose who was firing on all cylinders would have been much more suspicious, and certainly wouldn\'t have crept off in the middle of the night. Deprive her of sleep, add high levels of stress and then top it off with guilt? That\'ll work. And yeah, John should get a say, and he\'ll be entirely unhappy about what Rose did. New chapter coming soon!
Gah - this just gets better and better. The tension in this chapter really builds magnificently. Since you're so good at it, can I be cheeky and ask a formatting question?! How the hell do you get italics to turn off once you've turned it on? I can't seem to italicise a section of text within a normal section iyswim!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I\'m ratcheting up the tension, but I promise there\'ll be a payoff. For your question, I use HTML tags for italics. (I don\'t upload files, I paste stories into the blank they provide.) The italics tags are < i > italicized text < /i > without the spaces. That help?
>.< (squirms) I feel like Aiden is giving his antagonist part a run for his money. Forget Rose, he's definately antagonizing me LOL. Besides, you know I really like the concept of John and Rose together. And I'm really hoping John "rescues" Rose before she does something she regrets. (crosses fingers)
Author's Response: Aiden\'s motives are still a mystery to everyone but himself, but the effect he\'s having on Rose is not exactly a happy one, no. Plus, anyone who pulls the \"I know how difficult this must be for you\" card gets stamped with Smarmy Bastard in my book. As for John\'s reaction . . . you\'ll get that next chapter. But I\'m so glad to see people are pulling for John and Rose!
You've pushed the pace these last two chapters, and that can be a tricky thing. I think you've handled it well, though. You've worked so well all through the story to introduce plot artifacts that will crop up later, making their introduction feel very organic and necessary - Rose's discovery of the pattern in the various Torchwood occurences right at this point, for example. (I wonder if her dream of speaking with The Brown Eyed Man on the couch dovetails with the discussion the Doctor so obviously is having with someone at the beginning of each chapter? I'm still not certain with whom he is speaking, but I may be slow.) I am also still struggling to ID Aidan.
Author's Response: Thank you--it is always taking a risk when you kick a Plot into high gear, so I\'m glad it\'s working for you. The person or persons to whom Ten is speaking won\'t be known until the end, as he, she or they are part of the big payoff for the fic as a whole. As for Aiden, no reason you should be able to ID him--he\'s a completely original character. I considered making him the Master, but a) I don\'t know Old Who well enough to do him justice, and b) the Master would know better, and that\'s all I\'m saying for now. Anyway, hope you enjoy the final chapters!
You really know how to make a girl cry, don't you? This chapter was beautiful, and you had me crying and feeling terrible when Jake died! You're evil, you are! But in a good way.
Author's Response: Yeah, I\'m evil. I know. Just be grateful I didn\'t go with my original plan and off Mickey.