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| Rude_and_ginger | 2007.11.23 - 11:31AM | 3: Chapter 3 | Signed |
| Goes to show she never had a hope. As I'm working on a chapter where Lucy begins to remember what she saw that day, and that would just be like what she would remeber. Author's Response: When someone tells me "that's just what would have happened," I say thank you. :) | |||
| rutsky | 2007.11.21 - 12:52AM | 3: Chapter 3 | Signed |
| Well done, and extremely sad. After all the jokes and the wit about the Master, he is, after all, a monster. Poor Lucy, and poor, poor, monstrous Time Lord. You handled this very well. It would be interesting to read an expanded second chapter, by which I mean that Lucy's collapse, which appears so sudden, may not have been predicated solely on one starless plain, no matter how barren. The shorings must have been eroded by the Master in some very subtle ways before he took her there. I think you're a good enough writer to show us that. Author's Response: It wasn't just one starless plain; her whole foundation was ripped away at once. Think about it. This guy comes in, sweeps her off her feet, marries her in no time flat. She thinks she knows who he is--and then finds out he's not that guy, that whatever he is, he is completely not that guy and is probably not even human. And somehow her apartment has disappeared and she's at the end of time. On her wedding day. Still in her dress. You'd feel as if you'd gone mad in the space of five minutes. And what I didn't show was what probably happened on Utopia, which is what finished her off; they didn't turn right around and come home. I'm flattered you think I could expand on it, and I'll definitely think about it! Thank you for the review! | |||
| Islwyn13 | 2007.11.19 - 11:13PM | 1: Chapter 1 | Signed |
| And he broke her with nothing. Literally nothing. Stripped away everything she was, made her feel insignificant, so he could fill her with purpose...his purpose. Nicely done...the sadistic bastard! I love your writing. Please write more! Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I've got nine other stories here, check 'em out! When she felt as if he were looking deep into her and liking what he saw, she was right; he saw exactly what he needed. She was politically connected, pretty and accomplished--and more importantly, she was needy. He saw instantly he could break her fairly easily. And he did. Thanks again for the review! | |||
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